John H,
Most people err on the side of saying only what they want to happen; 'We will make our customers happy. We will become the biggest company in the business'. They don't say how and forget that a policy is a route to a goal, not the goal itself.
You have said how you intend to achieve your goal but you haven't said what the goal is. Maybe the standard has missed it out but I think you should put in what your company's main business objectives are. Then you say you intend to achieve this by...... and go on to say how, as you have above. I think that would be very satisfactory. Of course, some auditors would like to see a lot more, but that's their choice. You have the choice to make it what you want and, what you have said regards the means to achieving your goals, is right on target, especially the objectives because to set and meet measureable objectives that really focus on the business goals and continuous improvment of the QMS
is the basis of meeting the new requirements of ISO 9k2k. Don't forget the 'measurable'.
rgds, John C